6200 Project Management Site

Desk Crits

 

Erica Wagoner

studio dress rehearsal --

I think your project has turned out really great. I just wanted to send you some of my notes from the dress rehearsal a few weeks ago.

I like the way you've visualized your experiences, goals, and abilities with a map. The names of the streets and places clearly indicate what kind of information lays beneath, as well as showing off your fun side ("gene pool" is too funny). Check typo on "Passtime Park" should be "Pastime".

As to the way the pages behave, I like the way you've tied the interior pages to the map by adding the map icons on the "schoolhouse" pages. It might be nice to add the icons to the other content pages, like Pastime Park, Gene Pool, Library of Certification, and Technology Bay. Also check consistency between the titles on the map and titles of linked pages.

Finally, I suggest that you simplify your banner a bit further. The apple on the left and your picture on the right seem to really divide up the page without a clear focus on one or the other. The links with your picture seem to be more auxiliary information that could be moved to a small banner that runs across the top and/or bottom of every page. This could be maybe 20px high with a light underline or background. Then, the main identity for your pages could focus on the info in the apple: "Erica Alyssa Wagoner, Teacher, Librarian, Techie"

Tina Harkness

studio dress rehearsal --

Just wanted to send you my comments from the dress rehearsal.

I really like your project. I think this is a fantastic use of flash to increase communication with your team.

There are two things that I'd recommend to add a bit more information to your playbook.

  1. Before running the animation, show the typical play diagram with X's, O's and arrows. This can give the user a focus on what play they are about to watch. This would add another dimension that might work better for some players than others. Then, when the user presses play, the arrows could fade a bit into the background but still remain as a visual clue.
  2. Highlight positions to show either where a person is at all times or to show who has the ball at all times. You could give the user freedom to choose between these ideas. For instance, if I were the HB, I could just click on the HB position and turn on a red circle around the name -- then HB would be highlight the entire time and I could watch how I'm supposed to interact with others.

TeamDSL

"Jina, Your team has done an excellent job with this training. The interface is easy to use, the activities keep my attention, and the audio and video are well-scripted!

I’ve attached my review, it’s taken about 5.5 hours and it is thorough. Please don’t be discouraged by any of my comments. The biggest repeating problem I saw within the text was an overuse of commas. Within my notes, text or punctuation that should be added is in bold. I’ve also included a PDF of the final assessment, you’ll see that there are some odd characters in it. "

Part of TeamDSL consultation hours.

Jennifer Buoy

"I enjoyed writing a fairy tale and reviewing your project. The way you’ve paced the directions and your writing style were both very pleasing and motivational. Your students will enjoy this."

Hyo Seon An

I think you've done a really great job with this -- it's very informative, the movies are interesting, and you've included clever assessment tools. I like the way each lesson follows the same format with warm up, let's learn, and wrap up.

The intro screen could use more direction -- maybe add above images: "Select one of the following three lessons to begin learning about the Jeonbuk English Speech Contest and how to prepare." The Learner Manual is an excellent overview of the entire program -- this would be nice to access from the home page.

Movies -- these are wonderful! I love the music, dialog, and design. Function-wise I think the controls are really cool and designed well. It may be good to leave a little tag or some visual clue on the screen instead of letting the controls disappear completely.

Steps -- confusion between main steps (warm up, let's learn, and wrap up) and sub-steps of each. I don't think you need the term "step" in the content. Take off the extra bullet and just pull the secondary title up under the MAIN step.

For instance, in Lesson 1:

:: Warm up
Identify the lesson objectives

:: Warm up
Watch the video

:: Let's learn
Questions to consider

:: Let's learn
Activity

:: Wrap up
Lesson summary

:: Wrap up
Basic evaluation

:: Wrap up
Advanced evaluation

:: Wrap up
Further study

In addition, it may be helpful to have a quick list of what will happen per lesson or per main step -- it's hard to figure out how much content will be presented or where I am in the program. This could be solved with a short bulleted list at the start of each lesson that lists what I'll be doing in warm up, let's learn, and wrap up. Also, page numbers would help indicate that I'm moving forward or viewing new content.

Lesson 2: Planning for public speech, let's learn, step 2
Divide content into 4 separate pages, add more visual difference between explanatory text and sample writing. This could be making the sample text italicized or adding a colored background behind the examples.

Double-check the interactions, they may need more direction ("click on a cue word to learn more about it" or "rollover a term for more information")